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Each little lie, or hidden ambition
Hides in a hole, as is tradition
Riddled with dreams, and fearful obsessions
That once were loved, in someone's possession
All the broad smiles, each a facade
With monstrous trinkets: knit, torn, and odd
Still broken treasures can easily lie
To thoughts so forced they can't seem to cry
Though cloudy with tears, and false memories
Keeping a hope that fades to the breeze
As such locks can try, but still cannot
Forget what was already hastily forgot
By those that are troubled by labourous pasts
As thinkers attempt to help them at last
Claiming their tales and lies to be so
But what do imaginary people know?
Here's one of my favorite poems! I hope you enjoyed it, and thank you very much for reading! :)
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CarmineDevian Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student Writer
I love that, I hope you find time to write me a letter back some time =)
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
Yes, I really did enjoy this poem, it flowed along so well-like a silken strand of music. :iconcrazysoloplz:
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
:iconcrazysoloplz: So cute!

Thank you very much, and for the favorite as well~
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
You're very welcome! :hug:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
This has a great flow to it, well done! :clap: The last two lines are definitely my favourite.

I only think that instead of hastily perhaps a word with less syllables could be used, for example quickly?
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :la:

Hm... Perhaps! Thank you for the suggestion, though~
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
Anytime! :huggle:
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure quite how to describe why I like this so; but I loved it!
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
:D Thank you so much! I'm glad you love it!
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Lilithmae1231 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :D
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